Our prompt this week is the opening sentence from The Open Door by Elizabeth Maguire
The story is in
the journey,
not the destination
left foot
right foot
breathe in between
this is what it’s like
sometimes all you can do
is all you can do
the universe moves on
while all you can do
sometimes is all you can do
this is what it’s like
breathe in between
right foot
left foot
The life is in
the journey,
not the destination
Love this dogged tread, enhanced by repetitive affirmations, a sound echoing the keeping on of the journey! A most interesting poem!
I like the way you have used phrasing to enrich meaning. And the poem itself is so true.
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This is great. I love the way you’ve paced it. A great take on the prompt too, I wasn’t sure what could be done with it, but this is masterful!Thanks for taking part.
I so agree…breath inbetween the placements of the feet, so much can happen in the journey.
Dee – great thoughts. so true but you make it beautiful
Gemma – sometimes that is all life is – doggedly moving forward.
Sarah – thank you, I appreciate your kind words, especially as I have read your beautiful work.
Keith – thank you so much. What a wonderful compliment!
Melissa, you are so right.
Grizz – sometimes the beauty is just in surviving isn’t it? Things change and life cycles around through bad and good and all we can do is keep walking.
Oh my……..so professional
Beautifully, and poetically, said.
Sweet, and such a fun read! I love the way you describe the process of journey, left foot, right foot..breathe in between.. That really fed the flow to this. Wonderfully done!
I like the “all you can do” repetitions, echoing Van’s “it ain’t why why why why why – it just is.”
I’m sometimes stuck in the muck, just focusing far enough ahead to see the next step. While I’m plodding along with the mud sucking at my boots, it helps to visit Tres Leches and spend a little time looking at the birds soaring 🙂
Beautiful picture. Sometimes those steps are painful and endless, but whatever they are, they are necessary.
Well done!