Sunday Scribbling #187 prompt: adventure One Word : clip
heading out
at a pretty good clip
we were young and prepared
so we thought
for the trip
they could bend us
not break us
or crush us
or shake us
we were young and prepared
so we thought
for the trip
but the road just got longer
and going got slower
and young and prepared
wasn’t always enough
the bending got painful
and we moaned and we cried
this ain’t what we paid for
this ain’t the right ride
and we found
that the ground
sometimes hurt
when we landed
we found that the sun
wasn’t always so sunny
we found that the turns
were quite sharp
when we spun out
The ups and downs were
lots higher and lower
and the hills got so steep
and the going got slower
but somehow the slowing
made way for the showing
of scenery that blurred
when we ran headfirst
and the slowing and showing
were the answers to questions
and questions for thinking
and loving and sinking
in sunsets and oceans
and summer deep starlight
in grieving and tears
and warm winter firelight
we finally saw
we finally learned
It’s not where we’re going
It’s all in the journey
Now back to nanowrimo 🙂
I love the energy in this, the whirlwind, roller coaster speed and the ultimate reminder. Nice. Good luck on Nano. I haven’t decided whether to give it a shot. Four in a row might be enough for now. Might be a better adventure to let it go without me!
I’d like to hear about your experience with it and if you think it was a good thing to do? You can email me at deedeekm at gmail dot com.
oh gosh and thank you for your comment! I got so caught up thinking about doing nanowrimo FOUR TIMES IN A ROW!
Dee: This is a legacy poem, wonderful road map. How can we not love it all, the entire journey, the bold and beautiful immortals, the wizened tortoises? I love this: but somehow the slowing / made way for the showing…
ah I like that – the wise/wizened tortoises and even the daily soap opera, lands yes…
Wow- this flows at life’s pace, so realistically as if two young people loved and later fell out of love. Wow! Good luck with Nanowrimo
This piece enthralled me from the start, so much so that I had to read it our aloud. I had so much fun and was so glad it was the journey after all and not the destination. Superb piece.
This is great writing Dee, very clever girl aren’t you!I loved the rhythm of this and the wisdom behind it.
Thank you Linda – appreciate your visit 🙂
Hi Dee – I loved the rhythm of this (almost felt like going for a cycle ride on a hill you didn’t expect to be so big!). Really enjoyable to read Jae 🙂
This is beautiful and so true!!! Very nicely done! And, it was a change.. I am used too reading your stories:)
gel – thank you for the kind words and encouragement
old egg and Jae Rose – glad you enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme 🙂
Jenifer – glad to be able to surprise you!
Geez. Sounds like aging and life. Why does it have to turn out so miserably?
Kick NaNo butt, my friend!
Thanks Susan though I didn’t mean it to seem as though it turns out miserably. Just that maybe it takes a few hills for us to start seeing the deeper meaning in the stuff that happens. Thanks for the wrimo encouragement. Lets hope that it doesn’t kick my butt in return LOL
I love the sense of motion in the cadence! It is certainly in the journey isn’t it? And what of all that front end sprinting? The “if I knew then what I know now”? A quote from It’s a Wonderful Life: “…awwwww! Youth is wasted on the wrong people!”
Wonderful poem, Dee. 🙂