Sunday Scribbling 220: Birth and Big Tent Poetry: milk, resent, praise, hungry, dangerous, cough, part, dark, comfort, stars, dull
milk and honey
land awaiting someday
dangerous to bet
on future wishes
leaves you hungry
in the night
resentment dulls
the appetite
a cough in the dark
becomes fear
that too much time
has passed just
sing your praises
to the stars and
take comfort in
the arms of
the present
part the veil
brush the darkness
away for daylight
gives birth to
another chance
What an enigmatic poem. Much of it reminds me of sleepless nights worrying about the unsolvable and being relieved when daylight means that inaction can now be reversed.
spoken as someone who has been there!
I tried that at vegas but it didn’t work for me. should hav wated another day
Griz you better stay out of Vegas, dude. That place will eat you up 🙂
this is nice, i like the pace and i especially liked
“part the veil
brush the darkness
away for daylight
gives birth to
another chance”
Thanks – isn’t it good to know that we can mess up and have another chance tomorrow?
Hi Dee- beautiful piece- ‘sing your praises to the stars’ was my favourite line..there was a nice balance of knowing the world can be a dark place but also finding hope – and light..Jae
seems like we spend our whole lives trying to find and keep that balance..
There’s a zen-like, Ram Dass “be here now” quality to this poem. Grounding in the now. Having to shovel out all the school archives must have put you in mind of what is important and what not to sweat. You fold this omelet up quite beautifully, Ms Dee.
A challenge getting all those prompts to work 🙂 Still shoveling…
I’m with Old Egg… this portrays insomniac worries in the wee hours so well. Okay to save your poem to read the next time I have another night like that? Wonderful advice and beautiful writing.
Kate
thank you and I would love to know that my poem helped you sleep!
wow, quite a feat to get all those words in there, while keeping to the SS prompt as well!
the last few lines are really fantastic. great verse 🙂
ps: thank you so much for the comment, Im glad you found the post informative.
Wordles can be such a challenge. You did a great job.