weep for us
you stone and steel
for we have lost our way
rough weather
cast patina still
your age cannot conceal
that what you were
and what we are
our fates both would be sealed
For we are frozen
hardened cast
scars that will not heal
your outside matched
our inner hearts
we’ve lost the will to feel
Sunday Scribbling prompt: Sensation
Dee,
Your words are very poignant. Today, 9.11.11, I read them with a certain filter and perspective that may have been different on another day …
Thank you for this beautiful poem.
Peace,
deborah
Thank you..the day probably influenced me as I was writing it.
Powerful visuals and sensation here. I especially like this: “rough weather
cast patina still
your age cannot conceal”
thanks Nara – hope you are well 🙂
Great poem and beautiful family group with the little boy at the back with an animal of some sort. I read “…lost our way” in the third line in the first verse, was that wrong?
Thank you – you read it correctly but it is fixed now. Thank you for catching that and it is good to hear from you 🙂
Becoming stone inside..is a terrible fate..this flowed beautifully..like blood..pumping around a statue..waking it up..Jae
thanks Jae – HUGS!
The metaphor of the sculpture or stone having more warmth than humanity reminds me of undergrad work I did regarding the Pygmalion myth. Ovid wrote of a man who was so disturbed by his in-the-flesh choices in female companionship that he carved his perfect woman out of stone and begged the gods to make her real. He slept with the stone…until one day he awakened to flesh rather than stone.
thank you Wendy! I enjoyed your story too 🙂